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I think it charming to say that metonomia  and I often meet in the limbo of day/night -- quite late for her, and quite early for me. On one such occasion the other night, we read a short story by Eileen Chang, titled simply, Love. I was led there by one of Roger Ebert's tweets, which instructed his followers "Don't cry" upon reading it. Funnily enough, we didn't. Instead it sparked some very interesting discussion. It was a sweet story, but we were disappointed in the (lack of) resolution and the idealization of the single moment. It needed more weight to be significant, so the fabulous Meto suggested we season it up with some Lucian spice. It turned out to be harder than I thought! Mine came out kind of AU, and was inspired by the work of rthstewart  and fire_and_a_rose .

There was once a girl of many stories and many names. She lived many lives, and journeyed on unknown paths and endless waters. In this journey she was taken for a slave, for she was very lovely, with shining golden hair. The King who desired her was righteous, but also young and foolish. He thoughtlessly sought her freedom by declaiming against slavery.

Afterwards there was a grand feast in her honor. The King who had freed her noticed that she was not among the celebrators, so he went outside seeking her. He found her sitting in a peach tree, where she was staring at the moon. "So you're here, too?" he said softly. But the girl who had lived many lives and knew many things did not answer, and after a while he went back inside.

Later in the night, the cruel men who had been her slavers crept into the castle and stole the girl again. They also slit the throat of the young King who had foolishly believed that words and laws alone could halt deeds, and never dreamed of treachery. The girl was sold as a concubine in some far-off town, and knew fear and hate and humiliation for all her days. When she journeyed on, she often thought of that brief moment of freedom, the moon, the peach tree, the young King, and wondered what might have been if she had answered him.

Among many days and many lives, across seas and stars, you may meet the glimmer of hope, the dream of love. But some things are not to be.

Yeah, so kind of depressing, but there you go. Check out [info]metonomia's much more hopeful response over here
  • That is soooo SAD! WAAAAHHHH! There's no hope at all. Such regret! such tragedy and goodness, what a contrast between yours and Meto's -- hers is lighter and sweeter and hopeful and you do love your tragedy, don't you? Sniff. I do appreciate the focus upon the one moment of regret and hope and might have beens.

    • Thank you thank you!

      Tragedy and angst are my middle names, apparently. I didn't realize this was such a downer until you guys pointed it out! Might-have-beens are my very favorite thing about Lucy and Caspian, so it seemed appropriate. <3
  • THIS should come with a 'don't cry' warning. Because I am, right now, sniffling and trying not to cry. YOU KILLED CASPIAN!? And Lucy gets taken again??

    *calms down*

    This is utterly fabulous - I think you did better at sticking to the original feel of the story, but it's GOOD when you do it! Because here she should have answered him! He dies for her - which gives so much more credence to her remembering him! He freed her literally, not just in her dreams!

    And then you just go and break our hearts further, huh? First Caspian dies, and then "some things are not to be." (Except obviously they *are* meant to be, because it's Lucy and Caspian)

    And oh! The work with Caspian as a king! Lucy has lived many lives and has been called many names, but he is young and foolish and thought words and laws alone could halt deeds...if he and Lucy had actually spoken that night, I bet she could have told him about the dangers of trusting too much in the law, and taught him about how treachery worked without it actually having to happen to him.

    This is so beautiful, and I'm just going to go sit in my hypothetical corner and reread it and try to remind myself that no, Caspian didn't have his throat cut actually, *sniff sniff*. Lucian forever!

    Also - the "limbo of day/night" IS quite charming!
    • Aww! I so didn't realize how depressing this was until I read yours and I was like, This makes so happy! It's so sweet! Then I was like, yep, mine involves throat slitting and sex slaves.

      There are lots of my favorite Lucian themes in here -- the more morbid ones, I suppose. Number one is Lucy letting things happen, which I like to think she does at the end of the world with Ramandu's daughter and the sailing away, etc. And then of course there's Caspian being stupid and naïve to get himself killed for Lucy's sake; Caspian being stupid enough to have hope; Lucy seeing more terrible things/knowing more about sex than he does.

      Thank you thank you! This was best idea ever! Erm, I think it's time for me to write something happy. I'll get right on that... not.
  • OMG THIS IS GORGEOUS. You actually pulled a lot of what I got out of the story--the idea that this moment is important because it is one of the last moments that was full of potential--only Lucy's far more so, because she had a connection there.

    ALSO, omg my broken heart! Why does Lucian have to be so HEARTBREAKINGLY HEARTBREAKING?! <3333 it though, Lucian was my first pairing in this fandom, way back when when Jill/Rilian was the second most popular, I don't even know how that worked.

    I love that Caspian is a little ridiculous here--there is that in the book, I think, when he's clearly not...all that maybe he should be.
    • Aw thanks! I suppose this little snippet tugs pretty hard on the heartstrings, but hey. The heartbreak is what makes Lucian so awesome! Heartbreak! Angst! Self-sacrifice! I die every time. Two people designed for each other, but not allowed to be together. Sad sad!

      And oh wow, Jill/Rilian... that seems like so long ago! Somebody needs to write a good story for that pairing! Contemporary fandom has all but ignored them in the recent upswing of Cor/Aravis.

      Silly Caspian. As Francie's Edmund says, he still needs needs to grow into his kingship. But maybe not, because I like to exploit him. <3

      Thank you thank you!
      • Yeah, I looove my Lucian like I love my Susan/Lune: understated and doomed. Which, Idk, what does that say about me!? Ah, well.

        I was never quite able to take Rilian seriously, but I think Jill could handle him. And I was never a Eustace/Jill shipper anyway. I wish we could get back into them--I love Cor/Aravis, but there are other characters too!
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